song of wet pavement
with kettledrums and cymbals
i read between naps
© Tiwago (USA)
With the first two lines, I can imagine a parade or a march through a wet street and the splash of people walking on the street. And then the kettledrums and cymbals come, which heightens the sound, and makes it intense. This intensity makes for an interesting comparison between the second part. The two parts make a striking comparison.
Maybe the author is lying in bed, having a lazy day, while everyone is celebrating something–kind of detached from the world.
I think there is a definite feeling that sets in as one reads the last line. It is not simply a striking image for the sake of being striking.
Overall, I think it is a fascinating haiku that is engaging and maybe even a bit puzzling, but in a good way.
– Nicholas Klacsanzky (Ukraine)