twilight the sky mountains its silhouettes
© Gabri Rigotti (South Africa)
This is one of those haiku that you got to read several times over to see everything in it. One liners are commonly this way, as they can be read in several ways due to having no punctuation and phrases bleeding together.
Let’s breakdown the various ways it can be read:
“twilight/the sky mountains/its silhouettes”
“twilight/the sky/mountains/its silhouettes”
“twilight the sky/mountains its silhouettes”
… and maybe more.
From the various ways of reading it, one can a sense things beyond our comprehension or usual understanding–that behind our usual perception is an entirely different world, that we might be missing out on.
“sky mountains” could be clouds, or it could mean the mountains appear to be in the sky with the lack of visibility.
If a haiku confuses or puzzles you, but makes you feel something (especially something personable), it can be said that the haiku has achieved a great deal. Haiku should not be something explained and clearcut. It should have mystery, make the reader change their state of consciousness, to break out of our usual perception of life.
I think Gabri’s haiku has achieved this.
– Nicholas Klacsanzky (Ukraine)